tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7124761518218776224.post6601070309591323639..comments2020-08-31T16:41:35.110-07:00Comments on Lesieli OIS blog: 100 WC Becky Taylorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17861402062933624175noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7124761518218776224.post-12714595700882714642020-08-05T16:06:41.884-07:002020-08-05T16:06:41.884-07:00Thank you for the suggestion and for commenting! I...Thank you for the suggestion and for commenting! I'll definitely take your suggestion on board. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7124761518218776224.post-10285512018932404882020-07-09T19:45:13.963-07:002020-07-09T19:45:13.963-07:00Beginning with those short staccato sentences, thi... Beginning with those short staccato sentences, this piece has enormous impact on the reader Lesieli. Excellent onomatopoeia, perfect punctuation and pace have me sharing this scary situation with you and of course the ellipsis at the end charges my imagination even further.<br />Do you think that using 'Suddenly' rather than 'All of a sudden' might have more impact?<br />Thanks for sharing,<br />Jackie (Team 100WC)<br />New PlymouthJackie Cameronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01519676231736438762noreply@blogger.com